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| Scarlett Wynter 2008-08-27 ch 1,  | abuseThe first 3 lines are downright awesome. Great poem! |
| Iccle Fairy 2008-07-02 ch 1, | abusevery good! |
| Averybarbarian 2008-07-02 ch 1, | abuseI've read other poems with the same thoughts but this one is different in a good way. You recognize the fact you cant literally breath them in but the person is dearly needed. Well done |
| Twilight Starr 2008-06-27 ch 1, | abuseGood piece. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| simpleplan13 2008-06-27 ch 1, | abuseThe simile is nice and very relateable. I'm not sure why the first stanza is a question, but other than that I liked it a lot. |
| RodeoGirl 2008-06-24 ch 1, | abuseThis poem is true. I love the first lines you have. I really liked them. God is always there, but we can't see him. It is so easy to believe that there is air, but so hard to believe that their is a God. I like how this poem somewhat covers blind faith without using the words blind faith. This poem comes from the heart. I really enjoyed it. |
| brokencrystal7 2008-06-23 ch 1, | abuseeasy for me to relate to this. good poem |
| Lupus Grassic Gibbon 2008-06-23 ch 1, | abuseI like the repetition. It has quite a nice flow, but I particularly like the first three lines, they're a very good opening. |
| fatbird33 2008-06-22 ch 1, | abusegood repetition |
| Qzie 2008-06-22 ch 1, | abuseOh I rather like this. It's got this soothing feeling, even if a little bittersweet because of the speaker just wanting to be alone, even though they know they're not going to be alone. I'm not entirely sure if that came out right... wonderful poem. ^^ Chat later. -Qzie |