This was eerie, in a completely good way.
I love your style of writing, it keeps an almost cheerful lilt to the depressing tone of the story.

And somehow, you can't really feel any sort of remorse for that man. :)
Keep up the good writing!

Sad :(. I feel bad for her. Zack didn't deserve to get sick after that. And the girl didn't deserve to kill her self. but it does seem like something someone would do and that kinda makes me mad at the world. (shakes hand out window) lol.

Do you know the song 'Ruby Tuesday'? "Don't questoin why she needs to be so free/ she'll tell you it's the only way to be...Goodbye Ruby Tuesday...I'm really gonna miss you" Anyway, while this entire fantastic story was playing out, I was thinking two things: that song and how similer this story is to a really good Stephen King. I absolutely love it.
-R.V. Richtoven

This just goes to show that you can't keep people "locked" up forever. Atleast some people don't like it.
I liked the way you based the woman on the firefly.
Great job. This was really good.

I've found myself speechless. Or you could say unable to type out a review because I'm so amazed. This piece of work was brilliant- the detail was stunning, I could see everything played out in my head. Brilliant.

keep writing,
-Rachel

Beautiful and depressing at the same time. The build up was great, and the ending with the note and everything was perfect.

Good job, this was done wonderfully.

Beautiful piece of work here. I really like how you built up to the end. It depressed me just a bit, but it just goes to show you that you need to pay attention to what certain people say the first time. Keep on writing, because chances are, I WILL keep reading :)

this makes me think of keith urban's song, 'stupid boy'. i like how your story had an intense kind of tone, but didn't seem over dramatized. it also flowed very well. nice job..

I like how you described her as a firefly - very fitting. The note was a nice touch, too.
Good job!

Well now. This is a beautiful peice that shows exactly what happens when you build someone up until they fall right down, especialy yourself. This is truly an honest work of art that shows what really happens in the mind of someone who simply wants out.

~Storm.

Awesome story, very emotional ending! The note was a great idea too! Your writing is awesome! ^_^