honest and amazing.

i love this poem, though i'm afraid i won't be able to critique it very well (at all, even) since i know absolutely nothing about poetry, yet i try to write it.

it's such an emotive, and i love your choice of words. i love that when i'm reading this i can picture everything your describing and i like the sentence in parenthesis--it's sort of like a whispered secret. that's how it feels to me, at least.

and thanks for your review--i greatly appreciated it.

This is beautiful, you did an especially great job of describing how you see music. Antother nice touch is the line "(and the way you used to draw circles with your/fingers in my back)" because it shows that you really love this person enough to think of little details. Good work.

-Peace out.

ok, whoa! i had to read that a few times before i could understand it! the first couple lines are really confusing [to me at least]. i think that you should either take out some the adjectives or break up the lines a little more or something...'cuz honestly, i have no idea what the first few lines are talkign about

i really like the end of it though, it makes sense lol. but more impotantly, it holds emotion...i really can't describe why i like it, i just really really do

i think for the most part, punctuation is good. i think a few more commas (especially in the first few lines) would help it out a little bit, but otherwise it's good

i really like the italicized line and the parenthesis in the last two lines, it gives the poem depth. the part in parenthesis gives me chills, lol. good job =]

Very powerful, something I wouldn't want to forget.

lovely imagery, I like this part:

(and the way you used to draw circles with your
fingers in my back) of a person that i had almost forgotten.

sometimes people don't realize things are gone..

Wow. This is stunning. Very passionate, beautiful wording. The parentheses work perfectly, which is not something that can often be said about parentheses in poetry. Very relatable, and I love how you evoke not only visuals but sounds using your descriptions. Favoriting this.

I love your really lovely detailed images, the alliteration and line breaks all seemed to me to be perfectly placed and the line in italics didn't mess up the movement of the poem at all. It really shows the memory of the persona and the feeling inside the poem. Very nice.

great word usage

Interesting. The words you use paint a picture in the readers mind fairly easily. Well written! The line that caught most of my attention was “—let alone the depths of my pulsating heart” not just because you have it italicized but because it said the most without saying much if you understand what I am saying. Anywhoo I enjoyed reading your poem. Continue writing. This was well written! =)

this is beautiful.

yours until the wind changes,
gg