Wow. Amazing. You are a brilliant writer. *nod* I'm a little envious, not going to lie.

Hm, I really thought this was interesting. Eloise reminds me of my little sister...Although she isn't petite, she's almost as tall as me! And she's way younger. Haha.

Anyway, some parts got confusing. Like what was going on in the beginning, but by the end of it, I started to understand what was happening. Nonetheless, I really like how you described Eloise, and the events that occurred (once I was sure of them) in the chapter.

All in all, I thought it was very good. (: