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Oriel Kurosaki 2008-11-17 . chapter 1
...story of my life...
Confetti Kitty 2008-07-25 . chapter 1
That was really cute. I love the ending especially. Jessica reminds me of myself XD
Kneecap 2008-07-03 . chapter 1
Oh aye? Indeed!

Well, I'm sorry I took so long to review this! I went into a state of seclusion for a while because...well, it seemed like a good idea at the time.

So the line "And I would trade the ridge of my nose for his, any day. It's a good thing I don't suffer from vanity issues." cracked me up xD.

There were so many funny moments in this! Like the description of the dancing xD. But I'll admit, I was thrown at first when there was a 'Billy'. I take it that it's not the same Billy from 'Bright Lights, Black Rainbows'? (When is that getting updated by the way love? It's been a while). And yeah!

I must say though, that a hell of a lot was going on in this, it did become a little hard to follow at times, but meh, that might just be me :s. That's not to say I disliked it! Heckles no! Je l'aime!

And, just in case you wanted to know, I had forgotten all about this until, in a moment of maniacal nostalgia, I looked back at my history or reviews for 'HT' (smiling fondly at the memories all the way, of course) and saw ones you'd sent me, and at first I was like 'Oo! Good point! I'll try and edit that when I re-do chapter 5' and then I was like 'wait a second...I've forgotten something haven't I? *Thinks for a moment*. EGADS! A review!' and so I reviewed. And that is the story of my life kthxbaii &^^&.

Now update BLBL or die :D. Now.
nonaccount 2008-07-01 . chapter 1
I may be slow, and I am, but the flow of your story seems disjointed between paragraph one and essentially everything else. I expected some sort of resolution or circling back to the Boys Night Out *used* to be fun theme at the end, (and maybe why it no longer is. I mean, I get the "expiration" thing, but just starting out the way you did makes it seem, to me anyway, like that night some pivotal event occurs to cause Matthew to no longer like it) but it wasn't there. Just something to think about; and that certainly doesn't mean that I didn't enjoy this 'cause I did. :)

I like your turns of phrase and language that you used in this oneshot. Like, "those of us who weren't near heathen" which also makes me wonder if you're Southern. Also this great description of unrequited love, "He doesn't like the ridge of his nose, but I'm reduced to pathetic sighs when catching a glimpse of him. I'll be the first to say he's not perfect, unless I'm plied with alcohol, then I'm apt to drop the negative from that statement."

This made me laugh, "my dancing seems to be a mix of Nazi goose stepping and the final few muscle spasms of a hanged man." :)

Great last sentence, "He's gyrating and I'm lost in the moment, feeling free and unshackled from something that is beyond my grasp but that I've been grasping for a long time."
I was glad to read that 'cause I wanted to smack Matthew when I read "That's Not Billy!" and yell 'he doesn't care!' So yeah, be free baby, be free.
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