wow. this story is amazing. what are you talking about horrible? i think you underestimate yourself. and i like all the excitement. this is not a story i would read, but youve got me as a reader wanting more. very good.

:P
write more of this!
I'm most intrigued. you've got backstory you're holding back on us with ;)

don't like the way you elongate Trigger - in my opinion (probs not the best!) I would have just used more of the vowels in the word rather than the consonants.
the bit about the names having hidden meanings was a bit unnecessary ;)

domo arigato for the story!

oyasumi nasai

Very well written. I like the story so far and think you should definitely finish. This is one of those things that's going to keep me up at night until I get more XD.

Hmm. Intriguing chapter. I liked the characters, but I'll admit I am way more interested in the stuff they were talking about, like dying as if it's no big deal and their past. There's a lot of good stuff in here. I hope you make use of it.

Reviewed in the name of the Carny!

-Stardust.

Whoa.

(Geez, I never know how to spell that properly. I see 'Wow', I see, well, just that one. But I like my way, too!)

This is really lookin' to be promising. Trigger and Blade, I like it.

I think there's this show Parallel ... or something... This really gay show. Anyway, just thought I'd say that. I want to write another sci-fi, but, you know, I've no ideas. I guess I'll just cruise along, steal some ideas, put them together, claim they're my own ... No, I'm totally kidding. :P

(P.S. Have you ever eaten roast chicken? Yes, roasted, not fried. O.o Sorry, it's just on this ad...)

Whoa. That was... just wow. I want to read more. :)
I thought it was amazing to tell the truth.. I probably would have NEVER come up with anything of this sort. I have a lot of questions about the plot and would surely read more of this. This is the first story that caught my full attention.

Please write more, and I will read more! :D

-Pergamentina

This story sounds awesome. The concept is original, the chapter short (but not obnoxiously short) and mysterious, leaving the reader wanting more.

The characters of Trigger and Blade seem interesting. I wonder about their past...? (or pasts, in this case)

I'll be watching for any new chapter installments, for sure. Keep up the good work & happy reading in the meantime~

M.F.

Oh, wow! GREAT attention getter! Ou very interesting idea. I love how you mix humor in so that it naturally flows with the story (if that makes any sense haha)and how it's not over-the-top but just natural/something you'd say in real life. I love Blade, he's hilarious! At least so far haha. I'm not normally interested in sci-fi but this really intrigues me. Please update soon! :)

This is awesome!! I'd love to know just plain more. What is going to happen?
PLEASE!! PLEASE OH PLEASE continue!! It's a really interesting concept and I'd love to know more.

"They say when you die your life flashes before your eyes. I say that’s a pretty disappointing gimmick." You had me caught from there. Seriously.
From the beginning, it revolves around death, but in an interesting, mysterious (for a lack of a better word xP) way.
I love how you worded everything, too. It all ties in neatly and fits as a great start.
Can`t wait to read more!
-Gob (:

Very nice! Love the idea, and the name Trigger. It blended together nice and smooth. .V. Write more!

Excellent job! It's such a smooth read and you captured my interest with the first paragraph. Blade is already my favorite character. I can somehow relate to his beautiful singing voice. =)

I like it; it's a good start. You should write more.

You have a very original idea here, you shouldn't drop it. Quote from your profile:

"Parallel- I don't know WHAT possesed me to write this, but I'm having second thoughts about it. Don't expect an update any time soon."

You portrayed Blade and Trigger's friendship very well. And I'd love to find out what the hidden meaning is.

Please don't give this story up.

Wowza. That's a good idea for a fic, actually. You have a great talent for fantasy stories. Am reading Nightwing and your writing is amazing!
Keep writing, you've got talent :D

Sweet! Another awesome story! Good luck with two of them, and I wish to you a longer attention span than I have. ;D

This is a short, but tantalizing chapter. I like that last sentence: it really puts the whole thing in perspective, that the worlds and histories are never going to be quite like each other. Parallel. The "We weren't suicidal" line got a grin out of me too. Heh. /Nah, we just kinda... die for fun./

And yes, the names are pretty killer. I'm looking forward to a new chapter soon!