 Faith Adeline 2008-06-24 . chapter 2Good chapter, it's all very real. From her feelings, to how she's reacting to things. Good job. Umm. . .the only thing I saw wrong was this: "Oscar took in a deep breath, let's go back to sleep.'" Because let's is the start of the sentence, it needs to be capital. That's all :) Keep it up!
Faith
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