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| Selverwulf 2008-08-07 ch 1,  | abuseThat was a fantastic read although I can across this sentence “You were going some problems.” It was a little confusing because you forgot the word through. The raw emotion was very much felt as I read over it. This poem reminded me of a situation my one gay friend told me about way before I meet him. I really like the way the poem is all spread out and the way the lines wave. It helped to express the emotion of this poem. Selverwulf Member of the Reviewers Kingdom |
| jekodama 2008-07-15 ch 1, | abuseWow, that was sad. "You said you were an introvert But that still isn’t an excuse For abandoning your friends." Beautiful, and true. There's an underlying tone of frustration beneath all these words, and I assume it's because you didn't get a real answer for your friend's leaving (does that make any sense? Is that sentence constructed correctly?). I suggest you to fix this sentence: "You were going some problems." (I think it's missing 'through'). Overall, good job. |
| itse 2008-07-11 ch 1, | abuseI am not the best reviewer of poetry (as I dont read it much) but the message in this is clear. the frustration and confusion is heartfelt. I noticed a typo in "you were going some problems." which I think should be "you were going through some problems." Being an introvert doesnt excuse abandoning your friends. I am called an introvert sometimes mostly because i prefer being either one on one with my friend or in a small group of 3-4. |
| turtlequeen2 2008-06-27 ch 1, anon. | abuseO... That's sad... It does make you wonder, though. This was a very powerful piece. As usual, your poems continue to improve and amaze me. |
| STEVE HOLT 2008-06-25 ch 1, anon. | abuseI'm sorry you write such ** poetry that your girlfriends keep leaving you all the time. :( |
| jello 2008-06-25 ch 1, anon. | abuse>< aw. so sad. well she's not worth it if she doesn't even come on to at least say good bye. |
| Averybarbarian 2008-06-24 ch 1, | abuseI really like your poem. It was well written and you do have some good points. ~sigh~ The sadness of loosing a close friend. Anyway good job keep writing =) |
| SerialXLain 2008-06-24 ch 1, | abuseI like how it has the questions at the beginning and then ends with one too. The way you ended it is also a really strong ending. It's really easy to feel your emotions throughout the whole thing...and I'm really sorry that this happened to make you feel them. :( xo Lain |
| Thrice-y Thrice 2008-06-24 ch 1, anon. | abuseForgot my password... So Here I am anonymous or not so annoymous. whatever. You're very good at expressing your feelings through words. Sometimes that is hard to achieve, but somehow you manage to accomplish it. I can feel and understand the emotion behind this piece. It's hard to ignore. I have to say there are little to no grammar or spelling errors. Though you may have left out a word in Line 9... Other than. Brilliant piece. |