Oh, how sad. This really leaves one with a hopeless feeling. But I like that about this because it was meant to be that way. Also, I like how you can feel the involuntary rejection of the boy just from the first and second line. That means this was extremely well written. Great job.

-Dee, from the Review Marathon.
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This is so unbelievably sad and emotional.
-Amy

this is sad...
but such a complete story.
i love the first line, "all she does these days is breathe."
:]

aww, such a sad little ficlet. great job :)