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| WithoutException 2008-08-18 ch 1,  | abuseI really liked this, but the ending seemed sort of rushed. It seemed kind of like a random time for her to finally give in. The ending doesn't seem to foreshadow a successful relationship. But otherwise, this was great. I kind of thought Bobby had a crush on Leslie when they were talking at the diner...hehe. |
| White Rose Blossom 2008-07-03 ch 1, | abuseCute :) Loved the tension between them, and of course her little sister coming in at the wrong moments was funny. Great job! -Aria |
| Jayjack 2008-06-29 ch 1, | abusei love one shots. (sigh) |
| Pop the Bubble 2008-06-27 ch 1, | abuseoh, that was awesome. |
| duckliy543 2008-06-27 ch 1, | abusethis was by far the second longest one shot i have EVER READ! but it was so worth it. i loved how you stayed on topic and neer really carried off to something else,you established the main charecters in the first few paragraphs which was also really great. i really loved reading this because it wasent liket he other one shots you read and it was just so well written and well thought out, i really reallyloved it! |
| freelancewriter 2008-06-27 ch 1, | abuseits really cute =) good job! |
| x3life 2008-06-26 ch 1, | abuseaw this was so cute! =) loved it |
| GrannyP 2008-06-26 ch 1, | abuseWow, I really loved this story! It was pretty long, but it was great. I never read the first one, but I don't think I really had to in order to understand this one, did I? No, this one was good as an independent piece. So yeah, it was a great story! |
| Noie 2008-06-26 ch 1, | abuseWell done, as always! Thanks for the new one-shot, I love reading them. Have anymore for this mini-universe? |
| Oooh.Look.A Cat 2008-06-26 ch 1, | abuseanother very fantastic story kudos to you love the characters predictable but oh-so-cute loved it hoping there's more soon enough izzie |
| outsidersgirl 2008-06-26 ch 1, | abusethis is good |
| I Murder on Impulse 2008-06-26 ch 1, | abuseWhe |
| Sophelia 2008-06-25 ch 1, | abusewhat i really liked about this is the weslie's complicated narration. she's pretty dynamic as a narrator because you can tell she's hiding things -- such as her crush on ethan. the emotions in this were pretty intense too. nice one-shot =] |
| Lily Llynn 2008-06-25 ch 1, | abuseA very complex and emotionally crazy oneshot, and because of that, I would actually change the rating to a T. It's not fluffy, but it's very dark and angry and it displays the emotions well, which is why I like it. I'm very glad woodstock1969 added this to our c2. (: |
| woodstock1969 2008-06-25 ch 1, | abuseHey! I really liked this one-shot. The relationship was developed very nicely. The only thing I'd like to point out is this one sentence toward the beginning where you said something about a Y-chromosome and Weslie having one. That actually made me think she was a guy (particularly since her name is androgenous) until you described her outfit for the party, and then I wondered (briefly) if she was a transvestite. Obviously, I figured it out pretty soon, but I think taking out that one line would probably make things less confusing, just cause girls don't have Y-chromosomes. Haha, sorry about that. Anyway, I did think that the story was great; very powerful and emotional. Well done. |