|Reviews for I thought I could fall in love with you|
| english summer rain 7/6/08 . chapter 1
great concept, loved it. but in my opinion, this would have been alot better in prose, the line breaks sort of make it a bit awkward for me, it doesn't flow as well as it could. also for the ellipses within parentheses, it also makes it a bit awkward, i don't know if that was your intention, but i simple 'he' would have worked just fine. however, as i said, i love the idea. very relatable, and you portrayed it well. :)
(thanks for the fav. by the way)
| CigaretteBurn 7/2/08 . chapter 1
Wow, this was just amazing.
I love the line "I thought I could fall in love with you/but I couldn't even fall" ... that's my favorite part and the story that goes along with it is just awesome and typical about a boy and a girl.
| Averybarbarian 7/2/08 . chapter 1
Aw, ‘tis sad… but I really like it. I like how you made it a story with thoughts and considerations. You can feel the sadness and the longing and some regret almost. Well done!
| simpleplan13 6/27/08 . chapter 1
It seemed weird to put the ellipses in parenthesis. I liked the steam of consciousness in this piece, it was interesting.
| ShyGirl2008 6/26/08 . chapter 1
I really liked this poem. It was really sweet and thoughtful.
| Living Life Free 6/25/08 . chapter 1
Beautiful! Everything was beautiful.
Things in life you never really realize are valuable.. until they're gone.
| Isca 6/25/08 . chapter 1
"I thought I could fall in love with you, but I couldn't even fall." This piece is very interesting, in that it takes a unique perspective of love. Keep up the good work! :)
| convoluted cartoon 6/25/08 . chapter 1
"Yeah, I haven't forgotten my true first love
even if there's nothing to remember."
This was a beautiful, honest poem. Good job with the detail and the flow, it all worked together nicely and had a lot of originiality. Nice job!
| gg. lass 6/25/08 . chapter 1
this is really good.
i like the descriptions and how it tells a story.
my favorite it the 3rd to last stanza.
yours until the wind changes,