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| Nicki BluIs 2008-06-25 ch 1,  | abuseI commend you for writing a stroy with your friend. I know from experience it is not easy. I like the plot (from what i've read). I would suggest working on the flow of the action. (Cutting from thoughts to dialogue and back can be a little confusing.) |