I like this. It's nicely expressed and I think the repetition works well, particularly at the end.

Oh wow, this was very well written. I love the way that you repeat words alot, gives it a edgy sort of feel. Good job.

Great song, I really liked it. The lyrics were powerful and you expressed yourself and the situation well.
Good job!

[QueenVixta]

It was a lil better than what you said only cuz I was iterested in it when I read the summary
Though i didn't really get it
But I guess I wasn't supposed to
Good job