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Reviews For: Visions in a Kingdom of Yesterday
fatbird33 2008-07-08 . chapter 1
gerat story told. i loved the title.
Tammie 2008-07-01 . chapter 1
Your poem is wonderful, powerful, simple, magical and I loved it.
Dot Cubed 2008-06-28 . chapter 1
Ooh, I love this! It has a very ancient feel--which is obviously what you were going for, haha. Anyway, your description is marvelous as usual (I loved the image of slender fingers, like a violinist), and I really like how the speaking parts are all in italics because it feels like a part of the poem, you know? I think have quotation marks would've just interrupted the flow.
no.peace.los.angeles 2008-06-27 . chapter 1
What a lovely thought. I mean, it's mysterious and I like that. I loved, "so horrible, so beautiful, so proud." The repetition works there and what's more, it brings the statue to life - both literally and figuratively. I think you get what I'm saying. Nice work. Keep writing! :)
Saoirse Redgrave 2008-06-27 . chapter 1
Very visually rich. I especially like the description of the statue's slender fingers--it tugs at the eyes and seats the picture more firmly in my mind. I enjoyed it.

~Saoirse
Amarettogirl 2008-06-27 . chapter 1
Absolutely fantastic SS post! One of my faves in a long time the writing was brilliant, especially the descriptive, lyrical and content-driven words! Excellent!! I really can off no negatives I love it as it is and wouldn't change it! Here is my SS post on vision:http://amarettogirl./the-written-word/
Paul 2008-06-27 . chapter 1
A very clever idea. I like the way the language reflects the wonder and beauty of the place. And then that let down.
Isca 2008-06-26 . chapter 1
Wow. That was one of the best supernatural stories I have ever read! The undertones of everything unknown: knowledge, the future, etc, really made this piece a masterpiece.
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