|Reviews for ScreamItOut|
| sooner or later its over 6/26/08 . chapter 1
i liked the once for change, twice for miracles
| at the bottom of everything 6/26/08 . chapter 1
i like your message.
you have a few weak lines, like "let them just deal" which sounds like a bit of a cop out and "cause whomever can't take it needs to go quake it." don't sell yourself short for the sake of a rhyme.
add some stronger lines and you've got yourself a nice poem.
keep writing :]
| Rae Michelle 6/26/08 . chapter 1
This is shy of becoming a strong piece. I love the lines "'cause we don't do these things twice", and "one for change, twice for miracles". Keep it up.
| Isca 6/26/08 . chapter 1
I like the message. The only line I would consider fixing or revising is "Needs to go quake it." The word 'quake' just seems like the wrong word, but that's just my opinion lol.