This is...beautiful and perceptive and desperate. I love it. I think everyone experiences this in their walk with God. The part where you realize that you can't do things on your own and need His help. I...wow. Wow. You've got talent, missy. Flow, pacing, technique was all spot on. I love the quiet repition and the variance of it. Awesomely fantastic!

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Nice. I like it. Great work. I like the imagery and the emotions evident in this poem. I can tell you really feel it and it comes from the heart. This would make a good song. I could see some evangelicals using this in their church. Keep up the good work. Peace.

Very dark, searching, begging for hope. Your choice of imagery is reaching, desperate, and humble.

This reminds me of a song called Gotta Knock a Little Harder (Yoko Kanno, Cowboy Bebop soundtrack).

Well done!

Since I didn't say this earlier, I'll say it now: Very profound! It reads nicely, too. I never get tired of reading it.

O.. Rather sinister, its like selling yourself. I like it! Just a minor point, you've got a few spelling mistakes... But other than that, it's great! D