Let me just start by saying that I love all of the little details that reinforce Devon's pathetic-ness, like the white studded belt and his Taking Back Sunday poster.
I feel bad for finding this whole story funny, but there you are. The description is way over-the-top, and a perfect example of the angst this generation is famous for. :P And there's nothing really I can critique. It's just hilariously funny. So yeah. Thanks for writing this. :D