Straight to the point. The bold lines emphasize the emotion. I'm sorry for your (almost) loss, and I hope things get better.

I like this one.

I really do.

I can feel the emotions.

Keep up the good work! :)

Ouch... losing people is so hard... im sorry. The poem shows the pain and hugeness of the situation beautifully though, so that you can and should be proud of :\

short and (not so) sweet. so painfully to the point, it burns to the very core. very startling.