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| tibetan-knight 2008-07-07 ch 1,  | abuseSorry I'm so late with the return reviews; I've been in Vegas this past week. Haha. Ooh. I like this. At first I was reading it, and I'm kind of thinking this is something I've read before. But, then I get to the last line, and it's unexpected. So, I went back to reread it, and it puts it in a whole new context. Of which, I think that last line is pretty powerful if it can send a reader back to the beginning. Because, in doing so, it adds emphasis to the piece as a whole. Good job! --Rachel |