strange tale! i kept thinking i was
going to stop reading this, then i'd
read a little more, and a little more,
and a little more, and a little more.

that was so beautiful and depressing at the same time.wonderful details.

This was amazing.

I enjoyed this like those books that you finish and turn over the last page of the book just to go back to the beginning again the next second.

I read it twice- I'd never thought I would do it for a story on fictionpress. But it was amazing!!

Interesting is the first word that came to mind. I didn't like the summary (the quote didn't really fit, I don't think, even if it was from the story), and the story seems much more original than the title. :) That's supposed to be a compliment.

It's a bit strange that her name is Little Girl. Not confusing, jsut awkward. Unless there's a reason for that, and people really do call her that instead of her name, then a name or even just "the little girl" would be better things to refer to her as.

The merman seems cool. This story seems interesting. I like your descriptions - I can picture it very well, and it's not excessive - and your ways of phrasing things, especially little things such as "almost drunken words". Those give it a very distinctive voice, even if it does not sound like a little girl's at times.

Great story - interesting to see where this goes.