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| PinkTips.PrettyLips 2008-06-30 ch 1,  | abusehahah omg this is just too great, i loved it, and its a breathe of fresh air from the usual cliched stuff i'm tired of seeing. can't wait for the next installment, please update soon!! |
| Koki Enwai 2008-06-30 ch 1, | abuseWow. Destiny sounds like a. . . um, annoying person. Poor Riley. I like the way Riley reacts to her, acting sweet on the outside, but inside, it's completely different. But I don't quite understand it. Does Riley like Henry? Is that why she dislikes Destiny so much? The interaction between Riley and Henry after Destiny left was nice, because it revealed a bit about their normal relationship and whatnot. Overall, I really liked Riley and Tyler's characters. Vegas was cool, too. Henry seems a bit on the normal side, and Destiny's wonderfully irritating. (I imagine that's what you were going for with her character.) Riley's narrative was entertaining and carried through at a good rate; she didn't get bogged down in needless detail and her commentary was amusing. The title of the story is what got me reading it in the first place and I'm excited to see how you'll fulfil it thorughout the story. I'm looking forward to reading more. - Koki |