Awesome chap, and it's been FOREVER!
Anyway, Sidney's a real **
:/
I don't like her!

And I can't believe Aby isn't realizing that those chocolates were from Ty! I would have atleast suspected! I mean, the note kind of said it all...the 'I'm so full of myself' way that it was written, and the whole way it said how Aby said they were different...yeah.

Well, anyway, can't wait for the next chapter!

I like the last sentence of the italic-ed paragraph... sometimes, after a breakup we're still used to saying "I love you"- the heart always wins against logicality. The breakup with Jay was really well written :) Haha, and the stupid birds and sunshine- lovin' that. Oh the world doesn't stop, does it? The world doesn't really care if we're feeling crap or awesome, the weather is to its own fancy.

One thing though- if Aby's brother threatened to turn Jay to mush, why would he beasking Aby in the morning why she looks so f*d up and what happened to her? It should be obvious to him = =

Also this part "Since their mum’s disappearance, Sherrie had decided that it was her responsibility as the oldest sibling to take care of the rest of the family. Being two minutes older than Sam, he usually voiced aloud his thoughts on how weird it felt to have his twin double up as a mum as well, but let her take on the job anyway. They’d gotten so sick of takeout food it had almost been a relief when Sherrie proclaimed that she was going to take on the cooking from now on – a bit worrying at first since she’d never cooked in her life, but Sherrie was a fast learner, and she was a fast learner on how to not burn toast." I have one question- is Sherrie male or female? @_@ I think you're trying to say that Sam is voicing his thoughts about Sherrie but it comes across/reads as Sherrie is voicing aloud about Sam.

Oops, caught a typo- "“Oh babe, you pretty much look like ** right now.” Sean Mills was as straightforward as it gets. Add in the fact that his gay and preferred to be called Sese because “Sean is such a manly name!”" Should be "he's gay" instead of "his gay". Adoring the non-believer stuff ;)

P.S. I heart Gossip Girl.

-Sunlit

Haha, lovin' the title of this Prologue, adoring the childishness. This is good, and kudos for having no typos! Looking forward to the next chapter!

-Sunlit

Giggles. You is love. And this story is God. The end.

(I want Sese. He's hott.)

hehe
this chapter was funny!

"Here, want a cookie?"

hehe..that just tickles me!

Poor Aby. I really feel for her on that curse. My friend can't keep a guy for more than two weeks, but really, you can't just LOVE somebody to death in two hours. O_o

It's a bit creepy that Jay and Aby broke up so near the end, especially since he knew about the curse. He could have waited a few more days. o_O

Did he forget? Was it the curse? Or did he just think it was funny.

Ah, curses. It's more in how the cursed believe in them that the power works as.

I giggled at the cat-curb part. Honestly, even if you wanted to kill whatever you are about to hit, it’s human reaction to swerve out of the way. But who in their right mind would want to kill a kitten?

I really like the sibling’s interactions. Normally I don’t care for it, but I really do like it in your story.

The first thing I thought of when reading your summary was the Taiwanese Drama, Smiling Pasta, but I was not deterred from reading your story.

I would suggest that instead of using parenthesis to include added information, you could just make a new sentence. It would look more professional in the end.

I do find Aby’s personality charming, though. I prefer characters that are not all brainless and adorable. I can’t wait to see how this story turns out.

Another great chapter.

Aby makes me laugh. :) She's a believable character & I hope she finds love. Hehe. I like this story a lot. :)

Intriguing. I look forward to more!

hahahahah! this chap was funny
and aw, poor main character.
i forgot her name aready, to lazy to check.
XD
good job!
o hope u continue this story.

Oh my gawd! I love you. And you dedicated this story to me! squeal. This story is amazing and yeah. I read your a/n and it makes me sad that this story isn't going to be updated often but if you're going to be working on Forbidden Fruit that makes me happy too! :)

This was a great chapter. I was happy to finally meet Aby's family.

That jerk Jay, how could he break up with Aby! The jerk! Haha. I like this story and the main character Aby.