What book were you reading? Will you continue on with these? ilike it. I hope so.

You expanded with this one, and it's stunning--bravely tearing into the insanity that we all know lives in us somewhere...

McKinley

Interesting piece (in a good way). Great job at description. Nice work. Keep writing!

Good luck with writing, this story, and life. Have a lovely day and a wonderful summer.

~Twilight Starr~

I love this, and I'm not sure why. The imagery is just amazing, and it's so raw and beautiful and awesome.

I liked it. I thought it was good. And if you ever need any help, just let me know. I beta as well as write, and would be glad to help you :)
Anyways, as I said, I like this piece. It's very...interesting. Keep it up :)
Faith

I like this. I enjoy the metaphors and the way you describe the fire, pretty-ugly-pretty, and I like Angel overall. She's a paradoxical pretty-ugly-pretty monster.

I liked the other version better. no offense.