I like the repetition. This was short, yet powerful

For something so simple and repetitive... and so generically angst-y... I thought this was pretty good. I mean, I just thought it was good to see a poem that was pure, honest emotion - not hidden behind pretty imagery or undephirable metaphors. Anyways, hope to see more work from you soon.

- Thoughtful

Not my favorite piece by you... I think it was just your typical angsty piece. It is relateable though and the ending is nice.

:( i'm sending you hugs. i like it. it's very raw.

You certainly captured the numbness you were trying to convey. I actually started turning my head sideways to look at the pattern made by the I's all stacked on top of each other, lol. I think you need to rest a little before writing more poetry. Don't worry, poems of this variety sometimes randomly appear on my word documents too.

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