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| RomanceDruggie 2008-08-11 ch 10,  | abuseyou're not cool dude!! you made me cry like 7 times in the last chaps!! So sadd STUPID CHRIS RAWR |
| bitter.ch0c0late 2008-07-18 ch 3, | abuseThat how we were changed. - just missed the 's - That's how - no biggie i guess the 'no pain no gain' thing really applies again, nice job on the details ^^ this story's very melancholic... a good change of tone for a vamp story anyway, again, 'til i manage to read the next one ^^ |
| bitter.ch0c0late 2008-07-16 ch 2, | abuseyeah! i finally managed to finish reading the next chapter! LOL it may take me a while before I finish the others but I WILL read them the paragraphs really got better there's something in the way you describe the actions and the scenes - so good! anyway, 'til i manage to read the next one ^^ |
| MidnightFall 2008-07-07 ch 4, | abuseThe story is great so far. I can't wait to read more. Hope you write more soon. There isn't anything I would change. I was alittle confused in the beginning but it was straightened out in the end. |
| bitter.ch0c0late 2008-07-05 ch 1, | abusethis is a really good story although, it's kinda hard to read all those long paragraphs.. it strains the eyes =P but other than that, great job! |
| DragonsFlute 2008-07-05 ch 3, | abuseThis story is amazing! The details you put in are so descriptive that I feel like I'm standing right next to the characters. Update soon...I can't wait to see what happens next :D |
| Beast King 2008-07-05 ch 2, | abuseThis is a good story. The scenes and characters are so well described that it feels like I'm actually there. The part with Eagle and the boys...wow. That's all I can say about it. |
| Alice B. Black 2008-07-03 ch 2, | abuseI liked chapter 2 a lot, it was very action-ie. Let's see, as for Nickolas, I'm still not too sure about him. I like how he seems to want to be nice. He's such a mystery it seems. That's what I get at least. He cares for Susan and I like that a lot about him. All the characters interacted very well so good job again! The paragraphs were a lot better this time too and it was a lot more easier to read. -Alice |
| Alice B. Black 2008-07-01 ch 1, | abuseI really like this story so far. Honestly, a good mystery and good writing will get me hooked right away. Susan seems to be very headstrong girl and she seems like someone that is very easy to imagine as a real person. My only quirk was in a few places the paragraphs were just too long. I have a horrible attention span for things like that, they're kind of hard to read. But it is really good! Keep up the wonderful writing and I'll be looking forward to seeing more of your work. -Alice |