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shadows of a trackless sea
2008-07-06
ch 1,
abuseI really like this especially how you wrap it up so ncely at the end.
Faith Adeline
2008-07-02
ch 1,
abuseI like this, good job :)
Faith
simpleplan13
2008-07-02
ch 1,
abuse"and the building is just as incomplete/as the plans for it." I didn't like incomplete because you just used complete. Also I don't think you need the second line, it just seemed odd to me. I think you could put the first one with the line after those two, though. Just a thought.

"(forever and two days is more time/that what they have to complete this place)" I think you mean than not that

I like this a lot. The metaphor is really interesting, well extended and fit perfectly. It's a really creative piece.
Random-Idiocity
2008-07-02
ch 1,
abuseAwesome job on this, makes me think of all the things that are incomplete. Keep it Up!
dances.with.sunflowers.
2008-07-02
ch 1,
abuseI love it. I love all your stuff. (Well, I haven't read *all* your stuff- there's like almost 300)
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