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shadows of a trackless sea 2008-07-06 ch 1,	abuseI really like this especially how you wrap it up so ncely at the end.
Faith Adeline 2008-07-02 ch 1,	abuseI like this, good job :) Faith
simpleplan13 2008-07-02 ch 1,	abuse"and the building is just as incomplete/as the plans for it." I didn't like incomplete because you just used complete. Also I don't think you need the second line, it just seemed odd to me. I think you could put the first one with the line after those two, though. Just a thought. "(forever and two days is more time/that what they have to complete this place)" I think you mean than not that I like this a lot. The metaphor is really interesting, well extended and fit perfectly. It's a really creative piece.
Random-Idiocity 2008-07-02 ch 1,	abuseAwesome job on this, makes me think of all the things that are incomplete. Keep it Up!
dances.with.sunflowers. 2008-07-02 ch 1,	abuseI love it. I love all your stuff. (Well, I haven't read all your stuff- there's like almost 300)