 Melissa Norvell 2009-11-08 . chapter 15Very cute and humorous chapter. I was either laughing or inwardly saying 'aw' to myself throughout this one. Considering the recent events, it's nice to see everyone happy here.. |
 Melissa Norvell 2009-11-08 . chapter 14This was a really cute chapter. I like the interactions with Yuji and Maya. They seem like such good friends. |
 Melissa Norvell 2009-11-08 . chapter 13This was another great chapter. Things are definitely getting thicker with Sayonara, the meeting and the Shine guy thrown into the mixture. I wonder what will happen to Maya if she keeps hanging around him and why Daisetsu has a strange feeling about him. I also wonder what that meeting was about at the end of the chapter. So many questions, so little time. |
 Melissa Norvell 2009-11-08 . chapter 12Such an emotional scene for Daisetsu and Maya. I really liked this chapter and I can tell that their feelings are growing for each other and they are undoubtedly becoming closer. . |
 Melissa Norvell 2009-09-13 . chapter 11Definitely a turning point in the story here. It seems that Maya has shown something of an angelic side. I wonder how things will progress between she and Daisetsu now that he's seen her wings? |
 CanadianCookie 2009-08-25 . chapter 29I love how Daisetsu's so possessive about Maya! So cute~ X3
And go Maya! Show them your GIRL POWAH! XD |
 Lauren Quinn 2009-08-01 . chapter 29Wow! This chapter was AMAZING! I love how Daisetsu gets so protective over Maya. That is definatly my favourite part of this story, Angels and Devils falling in love with eachother. I think that this chapter has definatly been your best, and I really look forward to reading the next one. The only thing I want to critisize about this chapter is the discription. I'm not saying that there's not enough. There is plenty! But I would like to see in the next chapter, not a lot of discription, but important discription. Not just saying my tail began to show itself, but maybe add something in there like; and it began thrashing about in rage. Just an idea, though!
Keep on writing!
~Lauren Quinn~ |
 Melissa Norvell 2009-07-31 . chapter 10I nearly thought that Daisetsu was going to go far with those girls but I'm glad that he didn't. I do feel sorry for Maya though, she completely got the wrong idea. I'm interested in what will happen next chapter. |
 Melissa Norvell 2009-07-31 . chapter 9This was a pretty good chapter. I liked the action scenes in this one a little more then I did the confrontation between Daisetsu and Maya's brother. The only thing that bothered me was the lack of description on the Tornado Attack. I think that the attack should have been described because as a reader, I don't know what it consists of.
I like the portrayal of emotions and the beginning of Maya and Daisetsu's relationship as well. I certainly hope that Daisetsu comes back to her and that his gang can take care of Maya while she's down. |
 Melissa Norvell 2009-07-16 . chapter 8This was a good chapter. I can tell that both of your writing has progressed since I first began to read this story. I only had one problem with this chapter and that was that Maya's mother agreed a little too quickly to letting her live with Daisetsu for a while. I think she should have questioned him more about the project and her daughter but other then that I really liked the way that this chapter ended. It was emotional and very cute. Great job guys! |
 Melissa Norvell 2009-07-09 . chapter 7This was a very emotional chapter for both characters. I can't say that Maya's brother didn't get what was coming to him, however. I think a little more description of the fight would have been better to add more suspense, but other then that you had a great chapter. Great job! |
 Number One Dancing Queen 2009-07-05 . chapter 29that' was a great chapter^_^ update asap! |
 Melissa Norvell 2009-05-31 . chapter 6Looks like Maya and Daisetsu are getting closer but it seems that her friends are definitely not too fond of him, either that or they are jealous. Definitely look forward to your next chapter. |
 Melissa Norvell 2009-05-29 . chapter 5This chapter was interesting. It's nice to see their interactions with each other and it's also nice to see them slowly becoming friends as well. |
 Melissa Norvell 2009-04-30 . chapter 4This chapter was a little short and could have used more description to match up with the large amount of dialogue but other then that, I think you did a good job at making them interact with each other! |