Okay! As informed, the end-of-story-review. :) I enjoy your style and really liked the way you describe how both characters mused through things. How you described Alexei's mental processes and thinking in colors and lines was brilliant. What I also liked was how their alternate characters/personalities were so oposite of their personalities. It suggested that somehow, in this 'new' life of theirs they'd tried to become their respective lovers. That could be me just reading too much into it though. *laughs*

I must say it was a little hard to determine sometimes whether Caden was thinking or speaking in Alexei's head. May I suggest that perhaps the thought-speach receive a different representation? For example, my thought speach is granted a ":" in place of quotation marks. Some people use a single quote--or double if they're using British English formatting where a single denotes dialogue. *laughs*

The premise of the work is extremely engaging and interesting as well. The whole a previous life/memories intruding into a new can be amazing, and you played it well. That being said, it left me wanting more. For example, Caden remembered, but the reader wasn't privy to those memories. Then there was the premonition that 'something bad' happened at the carousel, but we never know if did or not or what happened. It was kinda... disappointing. You know? Of course, it does add an element of mystery. :) In life we don't know everything, so feel free to ignore me if you wish. *laughs*

Anyway, I like your style. *smiles* Cheers!

Normally, with completed piece, I like to just leave a comment at the end, but this... I wanted to comment on the first chapter before I lost the feeling. *laughs* The first 4 paragraphs were so strong and gripping. I'm impressed that you were able to 'catch' me that quickly. Usually it takes a little while before I decide I MUST finish a story. You succeeded in those first four. Nice. Subtly creepy, which makes me a little nervous (don't like horror-esque things *sheepish smile*), but makes me curious to find out what's going on. Onward!

that was a really good story. i liked it hope you can continue it. ^_^

Wow, you're story is very well written, but I've got to admit that I was a little confused. I didn't really know what was happening after the shower scene. Does Alexei know what Caden did in his past, and what's with the whole Raziel/Raum thing? Is it supposed to be them in a past life or what? Exactly what kind of horrible things did Caden do? I love it when the author makes me question their stories, it keeps me intereted and coming back for more.

Hope you update soon! (^_^)

Hi! I really love the plot of this, I just think that it would have been alot better if you took it a bit slower.

Although, unless more events and scenes happend, there would be no reason to make this more drawn out, so I understand why it's moving so fast too.

I'm a bit confused by the sex scene, it didn't make too much sense to me what was... uh... going on that could have Caden spill himself over Alexei's back, and Alexei spill himself on Caden's chest. I tried visioning it but it just didn't make sense if one was back-down on the floor with the other on top of him. Unless... did Caden pull himself out before he came or something? I thought that there was no penetration in that scene though, or did I just miss it...?

LOL. But aside from that I really love this plot. I think the only thing that irked me was that Caden has 'recovered' from his paranoia's and all that so quickly. Wouldn't he be wondering, you know, 'should i still go and wait for this person to come for me at the carousel?' since he doesn't know for sure that Alexei is that person?
Looking forward to more!

Why's he suddenly talking? Hmm...I don't know if this chapter is better than the others, but it was good. Keep it up.
Faith

I liked it, good chapter :) Keep it up and update soon!
Faith

I liked it. Good job :) Very intriguing. Keep it up and update soon!
Faith

I liked it. Keep it up and update soon!
Faith

Hmm, I like this. It's a bit confusing, so be sure to clear things up. But, other than that, it's good! Keep it up :)
Faith