 RememberMeWhenYouFall 2009-05-28 . chapter 1Great one shot. You're really talented:) |
 little-red-bag 2009-05-11 . chapter 1Wonderful piece of descriptive writing; it is very well written. One thing I did not get though: if he was innocent then why was he trying to delay the confrontation? |
 styling16 2009-05-04 . chapter 1nice!! :D |
 Silent City 2009-04-25 . chapter 1aww. that is pure sweetness:)i love it. |
 Chiclets 2009-01-28 . chapter 1This IS written pretty well, and I've skimmed over some of your other pieces as well. You are a good writer, and I enjoyed this. The flow was smooth, nothing was taken away from it with the lack of dialogue, and it seems a good length. |
 crashendingx 2008-11-09 . chapter 1Confusing, but well written. You could definitely feel the tension. It has a nostalgic, wise third party outsider feel that I adore. |
 Ginnie 2008-11-03 . chapter 1 I really enjoyed this story, and how you heaped so much meaning into it. |
 Pione 2008-10-07 . chapter 1I AM IN LOVE WITH THIS. :) |
 Super.Secret.Music.Mission. 2008-09-17 . chapter 1This also had so much emotion in it...I want to cry again, like I did with you story Don't Make A Scene. Gosh...how many times do you want to make me cry? :) I loved that they were giving it another shot...Great job! |
 cha-ching 2008-08-30 . chapter 1 subtle and sweet. I liked it :) |
 Boo 2008-08-09 . chapter 1 yes, the story did turn out rather well!great idea, one-shot turned out to be very refreshing;) |
 Devin-Jamie 2008-08-04 . chapter 1Oh, descriptive writing. If you can't tell, I try to make all of my reviews sound a bit different. No just "good job, nice writing"...it doesn't work out so well. I still sound repetetive. Oh well.
I'm a sucker for happy endings, and I'm glad that she slipped the necklace back on and I absolutely love how you used those two lines of dialogue to end it, but there's something about the ending that I can't quite point out correctly. I think it's that the last few paragraphs before the ending dialogue seem a bit rushed. Not extremely rushed, just crap!-I-can-only-write-half-a-page-more kind of rushed. Maybe it also seemed rushed because, had she thought he cheated, it shouldn't have ended so smoothly over a simple something someone at another table said. That's probably how I'd've choosen to end it, but you're far more talented than I am, so it gives off a so-so vibe. But, at the same time, it's kind of perfect...
I'm no good at getting my thoughts straightened out in a review- they never seem right to me. I should probably just start going along with the typical, expected reviews. Blah.
I really really like this story. |
 LiMay 2008-07-27 . chapter 1wow. this is really good |
 rachely 2008-07-25 . chapter 1This was very good. :) |
 Bellaria 2008-07-04 . chapter 1cute, interesting like it! |