I like the verses a lot. The images were powerful. The chorus is ok, but I didnt really like the bridge, I know what you were trying to do with a changing of the tenses at the end & it's an interesting idea, but I just didn't think it fit.

very morbid with the "die, die" repetition, but good songfic. I could "hear" it well.

Wow! Very powerful! I love the lines "Die, Die... With black ink I'll stain the red roses/and I'll take them to your grave, I'll miss you badly" Someone is rather angery... anywhoo Great job! I enjoyed reading it! Keep writting

Wow. The imagery in this was great. Keep it up!

Morbidly beautiful. I love it.