I think this chapter would work better if you combined it with the previous chapter. And that's about all I have to say for now.

I like the way she thinks :D

haha, this is good, i can't wait to read the 4th chapter

and i know i said i would review all of them, but they were so short that i just decided to give you one review for all three :P

goodjob!!

~Raine

Fairly interesting, and I find the writing style not unlike my own. The introduction was a nice touch, as are the authorian notes communicating with the reader.

The opening to chapter 2 is good, but seems slightly redundant; you've just covered the fire, screams and roars, so stating them again so soon leaves me feeling a little 'iffy'. By no means am I saying it's bad, merely that the trio that failed to stir Nerrie should be either omitted in a single bit, or perhaps even expanded on. For example, "It wasn't the wrath of the fire, the terrified screams of people around her or the tremendous, deafening roars that woke Nerrie from her nightmares." But that's merely my opinion on that particular line.

I enjoy the detail you offer, and feel that the descriptions add that extra little blend to the world. The joints popping when she was getting up was a nice touch, and I particularly enjoy the "special" quality of Amelia's description. Kudos to you.

I love the thought Nerrie has of the holiday and the fact none remember its reason for being. I enjoyed it verily.

The only improvement I would definately like to see is one you're already working on - the length of the chapters. I look forward to seeing events unfolding.

- Worldcrafter.

I hope you post more of this soon, because it sure caught my interest. Not much wrong that I could spot. =)