very good story can't wait of more

i reread the last chapter so the whole joesph and kyle thing is cleard up good chapter

its good but was the boys name kyle not joseph anyway right more soon

please keep on with it, keep up the momentum

the plot is imaginative, im curious to what will happen! :)

The family relations in this chapter was sweet. Nice work.

~Twilight Starr~

Good chapter, very interesting, but who is Joseph I don't remember reading about him before, anyway PLEASE UPDATE SOON!

I really like your story and I can't wait to read more, I don't have anything bad to say about it or anything you can improve on you have a very well rounded story and like I said I can'wait to read more... PLEASE UPDATE SOON!

This was another really good chapter. Meagan and Kyle are just so darn cute. I'm surprised Meagan's mother is a teacher, and that Meagan and Kyle are in her class and have her the same period. It's a good surprise, nonetheless.

I can totally relate to Kyle's nervousness. I used to be nervous whenever I talked to guys about two years ago. Thank goodness I don't have that problem anymore. :P

I can't wait to see what happens next. Oh, yes, time to point out more mistakes before I forget (yay...just kidding =D).

Kyle ran into the classroom only to find out that he was the first person there. He hated that. He was rushing to get to class on time, after running into the most beautiful girl in the world.

There shouldn't be a comma before 'after' in this: 'to class on time, after'.

Looking at his schedule Kyle felt like an average student. Though he was one of the only nineth graders in the Biology class, he felt all alone. He had finished his foreign language classes during the summer, he was also one of the only students to ever do that. He felt like he had done it all when it came to grades. The one thing he hadn't done yet, was date a female.

There should be a comma after 'Looking at his schedule'. Also, in this paragraph, 'nineth' should be 'ninth' and at the end (where it says 'he hadn't done yet, was date a female), there shouldn't be a comma after 'yet'.

"Hello," the teacher said looking at Kyle.

There should be a comma after 'said'. And if you don't want to do that in any instance, you can put 'while' as a substitute for a comma, I suppose.

"It's nice to meet you Kyle. I'm Mr. Taylor. I'm new to this school. This is my first time ever teaching actually."

There should be a comma before 'Kyle' and a comma before 'actually'.

"No. I teach writing enrichment as well. I would have taught reading enrichment, but that's not offered in this school. Kind of strange isn't it?"

There should be a comma before 'isn't it?'.

"Yeah. Most of the people that go to this school had horrible writing scores. And usually when you can't write, you have a hard time reading too. But, I guess not."

Where it says 'you have a hard time reading too', there should be a comma before 'too'. There shouldn't be a comma after 'But' in 'But, I guess not', too.

Mr. Taylor and Kyle both watched as the classroom filled with 25 more students. All of which were loud and out of control.

This sounds a little funny because the second sentence is a fragment. You could change it to 'Mr. Taylor and Kyle both watched as the classroom filled with 25 more students. All of them were loud and out of control.'. You could leave it if you really want, however. It's just a suggestion.

"So, how has your day been so far?" She asked him.

I don't think the 'S' in 'She' should be capitalized, and I'm not sure about the comma after 'So'.

"So, how come your day is going well?" He asked trying to focus on his full plate of corndogs and French fries and not on her beautiful facial features.

I also don't think the 'H' in 'He' should be capitalized. And same as above, I'm not positive if there should be a comma after 'So' at the beginning.

Kyle smiled at her. "I have her too. Mrs. Alexander right?"

I think there's supposed to be a comma before 'too'.

Meagan gasped with shock. "Really? I do too. That'll be the best class ever."

Also, I believe there's supposed to be a comma before 'too' in this one.

Eek, sorry once again for the long review. I thought I'd just point out these minor mistakes to help you. (:

I can't wait for an update.

-Ella K.

Although this is rather short, I really did enjoy it. I thought it was interesting how Kyle and Meagan met. It's different than the ways I've read about, and that's a good thing (in my opinion).

I love how Kyle is a bit shy around Meagan and vice versa. That's so cute. I tend to think a lot of things are cute, though, so just ignore me on that. :P

Anyway, since you're looking to improve your writing skills, I'll point out a few things I think might be wrong.

When he came across the book, he reached for it but instead of grabbing the book he grabbed a soft hand. A female's hand.

Should there be a comma before 'but' and a comma after 'grabbing the book'?

"Oops! Sorry," she said moving her hand and turning away.

Again, shouldn't there be a comma before 'moving her hand'?

"No, it's my fault. You can take it," Kyle looked at her. She was beautiful. He couldn't help but smile at her. She smiled back at him. "I'm sorry about that. You can take the book. I will just read it after you. I wasn't really trying to read it today anyways. I just wanted to start before someone else got to it. But, it's okay, you can take it." He paused for a breath.

After 'read it today' and before 'anyways', I believe there should be a comma there. And I don't think the comma after 'someone else got to it. But' should be there.

Kyle, looked at the clock and figured that he wouldn't mind being late to his classes.

After 'Kyle', there shouldn't be a comma after it.

"You can take the book if you want to," Meagan said breaking his thoughts. "I don't mind. I could go and buy it."

There should be a comma after 'said', or so I think. Sorry for all of the comma comments. =P

"Well, I guess I should get going," she said grabbing the book and leaving.

Again, shouldn't there be a comma after 'she said'?

"Yeah," he said letting out a sigh of relief. He whispered to himself, "Maybe more then I know."

And finally, shouldn't there be a comma after 'he said'?

Sorry for this insanely long review. I was just pointing out some errors. Other than all of this, I thought it was great. Off to read the next chapter. (:

-Ella K.

The ending line was cute and made me laugh. ^^ Nice work. Keep writing!

~Twilight Starr~

"A/N: Haha!! A very slow chapter"

All of your chapters are short.
Cheater.

Anyways, I'm just waiting for some more stuff
to develop along here. It obvious the two are going
to end up together or something like that. Hoping for
other characters to pop up around here cause some
kind of conflict maybe?

Get chapter three and I will say more. If I even
feel like continuing on with this story. jk.
I'll continue.

Tuesday_

Hmm. I think those AN is longer then the chapter.

Hah!

Cute beginning. I like the title. Nice work. Keep writing!

~Twilight Starr~

I think this story has really good potential if you stick to it, I really like the consept and can't wait to read more, an I really hope you like Derek, anyway PLEASE UPDATE SOON!