I am really confused right now, but it's really good! I can't wait to see what happens, and I'm curious about what the Galahad family wants with Sloane, and why they can't get him while the girl is there. Update soon, and if you get a chance, please R&R my story Irys. Thanks!!

Hmm... Great start, much better than some of the things I've tried to write. The very beginning was a bit confusing, though. You have an awesome choice of names. Maida and Sloane, so unique! And your ending was fabulous; huge mystery left hanging, making people want to read more to find out. Update soon!