The visual effect produced by the "Tenderly / Gently / Soothingly / Softly / Silently" stuff, how it all tapers to the point is GREAT. It's like a charging train that can't be stopped. However, this effect is ruined with the dots on Silently - it makes it off balance from the rest of the lines.

-Jesse
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Wahh~~ this story is so... cool XD

What I really like about this is that it's like every word has place in this story; take something away and it would lack something :D

Just that, in the bit that goes,

'The night is young,
The night is cold.
I see you shiver,
And pull up your covers.

Scared.'

It feels to me that I read the first bit and went, ahuh, and then the 'scared' sort of hit me in the face and I had to bactrack slightly, because I thought that the person was shivering from the cold, but at 'scared', I wasn't sure now whether to think the shivering was from the cold or because the reader was scared.

Thanks for writing this- great work, as usual :)

-Iris