this is very beautiful.~erAced~

This reminds me of my own life. I guess that's what poetry is supposed to do, bu this really struck a chord with me.

This is definitely my favorite. The rhyming is solid-ish all the way through and you said some things that really make sense and make it feel unique. I like how you separate them into two people, the girl of today and the one of before. It makes the difference very clear. I also like the title/first line.

The idea of how "That promise was just a lie never meant to be true" is one that really fits and makes so much sense, but I don't see it expressed so clearly very often (or at all . . .). The idea of a broken promise is a really common one, but one that was broken which was never meant to be true in the first place hurts so much more. Saying that she "Now is forgotten, lost in plain sight" is the same sort of idea, which I really like. Losing things that are right in front of us happens all the time, and using it here makes her feel all the more lonely.

The last line is so bittersweet. It makes the poem seem like so much more than thoughts of what was and makes the girl feel so much more real.

ah nice!i really like this..hehe..well written and good job! :)
i wish i could make it a tune..hehe..
btw, i was wondeing..who was the girl you're talking about?
yourself?or am i just misinterpreted it..?hehe..
i've made poems and it has "shadow" on it and it pertains to myself...
just asking^^

What a guilt trip!

I thought it was a good piece, though. Very despondent and angsty; very teenagery. Which, of course, is the point, so kudos!

You got your message across. What more can a poet ask for?

-Durak