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| miscellanea 2008-07-13 ch 1,  | abuseAlthough the term 'spinning lies' is sort of common, I really loved the part where you say, 'they don't catch flies.' That was rockin. |
| ohthevoices 2008-07-13 ch 1, | abuseReview game! I liked the rhyming, probably because I'm terrible when it comes to rhyming. I like to see when people not only rhyme, but rhyme well. And it worked with this one. I also liked the rhythm. It didn't falter once; and it made this a lot easier to read. |
| xxInsanityxx 2008-07-11 ch 1, anon. | abuseIs this about me? If it is I'm sorry I didn't mean to drag you into this... anway I like the poem and the way you set it up... Good work ~xIx |
| Thoughtful Silence 2008-07-09 ch 1, | abuseI loved the repetition in this, it worked well with this 'web' imagery... if ya know what I mean? The rhyme scheme too added to this, despite it being a bit simple. One thing though, the syntax of the last line in the first stanza was a bit off. Anyways, keep up the good work. |