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| S. M. Saves 2008-08-15 ch 1,  | abuseYour piece flowed down the page just like tears. It was very smooth and natural. Awesome! |
| My World Of Fragile Things 2008-08-04 ch 1, | abusei loved the ending. all together a good poem. thanks for the review. |
| Moon's Poetess 2008-07-20 ch 1, | abuseVery sad and, even worse, very realistic and believable, but those, although negative, make it a good poem. I like the last stanza best. So few words express so much pain and trouble. |
| ohthevoices 2008-07-17 ch 1, | abuseThis was beautiful, in a tragic sort of way. My favorite stanza was the last, because it was so powerful, and I think it gets the point across more than the rest of the poem. |
| Luna Turner 2008-07-10 ch 1, | abuseI like the overall theme- it's cliche, but not cliche. Sorry, that's a little confusing. If there was any typos, I didn't see any, and I didn't catch any errors either. Pointer- In your first stanza, you kind of rhymed! But manybe it was on accident... XD ~Luna Turner |
| irakushi toyama 2008-07-09 ch 1, | abusei liked it very emotional i would like u to read a love poems i wrote here it is regreting love flames in my eyes shadows reflecting through the night i run hoping ill die death is in the air the moon is rising it starts to rain water is dripping off my nose my hair is damp i start to cry i fall to my knees and i want to die i scream at the sky how could i let this happen the beast within has taken over i have done wat ive always wanted to do with her and in doing so ive lost her without her my life just a black hole of dread and regret i cant live with myself so in order to stop my aching heart i grab the razor ending my life FOREVER this poem will soon be available to the public please tell me wat u think |
| brokencrystal7 2008-07-09 ch 1, | abusegreat poem. i like the lines that says, "outside smiles are worn, inside arguments flare" because i can relate to that in a way. great work. hopefully you can check out some of my work :) |
| smashmypumkinsx 2008-07-09 ch 1, | abusegood poem i really liked it |