The descriptions and allusions to cards are what made the fic. Brilliant, every word of it :)

I liked this a lot. It had a very poetic feel to it, even though it's prose. I liked how everything had a very literal meaning, as well as a metaphorical one. You told a lot about the main character in few words, yet didn't weigh the reader down with unnecessary information.

As far as critisism, my main suggestion would be to watch the length of your sentences. Sometimes, the sentences became so long that I had difficulty figuring out what they were saying. Just try to mix in some shorter sentences once in a while.

Very nice job!

tragically beautiful. im glad you posted this piece very well written

Honestly (yech, I hate criticism), I don't like the last line; it's kind of awkward. But the rest of this... yow. Some powerful stuff, particularly with all the card metaphors. Two thumbs way up!