That was my favourite chapter so far. No concrit here.

You really piquied my interest here. The interaction between the sisters was believable, but they're all pregnant? O.o Interesting. . .

Keep up the good work!

- Koki

Curious to see how you're going to pull this off...

R

Oh, wow. I think I remember reading the original version of this. . . You've got quite a good thing going here. I like the touches you added that made it seem like the reader was right there in Puerto Rico. Very well done.

- Koki