I enjoyed this story and I cannot wait for the third chapter. It really captivates its audience; mainly due to the good use of short sentences, powerful adjectives, as well its rhythm.

Although you feel sorry for the main character, the way his situation develops - and namely, the situation/relationship between him and his "friends" develops - interests the reader. It kept me reading on!

Moreover, I loved the fact that this story is a compiled with several different themes - mainly the contrast between the realistic situations(i.e. his relationship with his "friends"), and unrealistic situations (e.g the fact that he has been given another chance) present in the story. Personally, I think it's a treat for everyone; just watch those grammatical errors! XD

P.S Firstly, sorry if this review made little sense - I am shattered! Secondly, I agree with concerto49, it is a little short to give it an accurate review; you can still make or break the story . . . hopefully more "making" will be involved XP

- kidjournalist (HK)

It's good to have a try at new things, good or bad. I'm terrible at second person too. You did better than I would have done and managed to do the suspense right. I guess that's what second person is about, trying to draw the reader in. It feels like an adventure - well who knows what you could make from it. It is a little too short to say.

Wow, that was really good. I wish I could write like that -sighs- It was really, really good! I loved it!