|Reviews for Prodigal Returned|
| L.Z.A.K 7/5/09 . chapter 1
I loved the part about the Spirit. It's like when you feel it's presence, you are willing to do whatever it takes for that overwhelming feeling you get to stay forever; like you become addicted to the warming, invisible embrace.
| Isabella22 4/17/09 . chapter 1
| PoetryQueen 11/2/08 . chapter 1
I like what you are saying, but the words are a bit confusing... Not bad, but you switch time frames at one point, and there is one part that is a little too wordy. I hope I don't sound harsh! I have this problem with being a little too critical. Here are my ideas for this piece, you don't have to change a thing though...
You see that when you forgive
It won't be the last time for this sin
What I want to do, I don't do
And what I don't want to do, I do
Here is what I would make this...
You know that when you forgive me,
It won't be the last time I sin.
I want what I can't have,
And have what I don't need.
Here is where you change time points of view...
I fall into its trap
Then shamfully hide from you.
Lord, I am your prodigal son
Here is what I would say...
I fell into its trap,
Then I shamfully hid from you.