|Reviews for My lips are chapped|
| Time To Change 10/19/08 . chapter 1
realistic to depression.
| PoetryQueen 7/25/08 . chapter 1
Very sad, but well written. Why do you have this in a poetry form? This would make a better short essay I think. Still, great job!
| simpleplan13 7/20/08 . chapter 1
I like how you start with the mangoes and then incorporate it at the end, it works really well.
I like the whole piece, it makes a really great point and is extremely powerful. I especially like your phrases like "make-believing" other phrases like that were a great addition to the piece.
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| astral boy 7/15/08 . chapter 1
That was brilliant, the last two lines of course make the irony clear- a great way to end an already powerful poem.
Thanks so much for your reviews. Keep writing!
| ilove2writebooks 7/12/08 . chapter 1
JEZ dats good!
(Read mine plz)