realistic to depression.

Very sad, but well written. Why do you have this in a poetry form? This would make a better short essay I think. Still, great job!

I like how you start with the mangoes and then incorporate it at the end, it works really well.

I like the whole piece, it makes a really great point and is extremely powerful. I especially like your phrases like "make-believing" other phrases like that were a great addition to the piece.

PS If you're bored check out the Review Game and/or the Review Marathon (links in my profile).

That was brilliant, the last two lines of course make the irony clear- a great way to end an already powerful poem.

Thanks so much for your reviews. Keep writing!

JEZ dats good!

(Read mine plz)