I really like this story, sorry for the generic review, but I don't have much time at the momenmt.
I really like Mika, she is awesome!

Hey!

I like how you describe Mika's usual life here, it gives her a more regular touch and she doesn't seem like superman or anything. Well actually I guess she kind of is now that I think about it but in a more realistic way.

I enjoyed this chapter immensely, I guess I might even say some what more than the previous just because I like mellow moods and common life styles.

KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK!

-Kaiyako K.

okay...whew, all done. what lengthy chapters - which usually i don't mind, and i have some suggestions:

-you use a plethora of descriptions, which isn't at all bad, but perhaps you could stretch them out, or place them more strategically in the story. sometimes, all of the details really weighed down the story, causing it to fall into a lull.

-it would be better if you put your "inside author notes" down at the bottom. an example would be the pun from Neon Genesis Evangelion. some people may actually know about that, so it'd be better to have it at the end, just to tie things up and recap.

-i'm a little confused about the Japanese Kings and how they crossed either... A- across Mexico AND the Pacific Ocean to reside their, or B- through Africa, Europe, Asia, blah blah blah. honestly, Puerto Rico seems a bit too far. i know that the Spanish used to have colonies in the Philippines, which may be more realistic, especially with the ethnic tensions that already exist between the two (that i've heard of).

otherwise, it was pretty enjoyable, and i would love to see more suspense and tension woven throughout the rest of the chapters. afterall, this is a mystery - one of my favourite genres! bonne chance et continue, s.v.p.!

Hey!

Okay, I like where you're heading with this story. The plot seems original, but there are a few things I would like to comment on.

First, this chapter is a bit information heavy. I mean not in length, but you try to describe what almost every character looks like. You don't really have to do that, it can sometimes irritate readers. Let us imagine what they look like. I mean you can describe the main character but you don't always have to describe what color dress she's wearing or something like that.

I like Mika, she seems so cute, and still so brave. She's seen hardship, I mean she saw someone murdered before her eyes and she lived through it and is trying to find the killer instead of locked up in a loony bin. I think that's cool. ^^

I like the title as well, Stargazer, sounds so cool. Ha-ha, keep up the good work, I'll be rooting for you! ^^

-Kaiyako K.