That ending made me question the whole story. It was really, very rushed, and was both dissatisfactory, and complete at the same time. I don't know how to explain.
I'll go back a bit. The second-to-last segment: That fight was not something I'm used to. No real action or anything, just a simple few strokes; It was over way too fast.
The last line of that segment was also unclear, who limped toward freedom? I understood when I finished, but that left me confused, and not in a good way.
Overall, however, I liked this. The fact that swordplay came into the storyline was surprising, because up until that point, I had thought this was a modern tale. The parallels with our own world are that damn good.

Interesting first chapter.

I like the idea of already having your society set up in the first chapter. Makes a lot of sense, and helps readers understand where the characters are coming from.

I can't wait to see where you go with this. I'm adding you to my alerts list so that I can continue to review for you when you post, okay?

Also, I am new to this site and decided to start posting my own stuff on here so that people can give me some feedback. People don't know me on here, so I don't think they'll read my story, but if you're interested in taking a peek, it's called 'The Curator' and can be found on my profile page.

Thanks for the great read! I hope youupdate soon.