 DarkShines2012 2008-07-14 . chapter 1Okay...Jurassic Park riddle...
I'm probably wrong here, but I'm assuming that you're talking about the mass destruction that befell the entire island when science grew out of control.
I dunno, I could be wrong.
Very short chapter, but I realize that it was just the summary and the prelude. I like the concept, it has been a while since I've seen a story about chemical disaster. Is it going to be a biological agent, or just like radiation or toxic fumes? I think that a combination of the two would be interesting. If you would like more information on biological warfare and how it works, let me know and I can give you the rundown.
But- you're the author, and I shouldn't be butting in...hehehe
Sorry.
Anyway, not much else that I can say because it was just the prelude, but I can't wait to see what your characters do in this situation. I think that this will be a story with great intrigue and I can only imagine what horrors that group of teens will come back to. Oh, my. Can someone say 'oops?'
It will be interesting to see how they react, who is able to keep their head through all of this ordeal, and how they find a way to fix everything. Or if they find a way to fix this problem at all.And what happens when the "Chemicals escape"? Hm...you've set up a great plot for yourself here. I'm sure that you'll find ways to have your fans gripping their keyboards in anticipation.
Well, now that I've talked your eyes off, I will do a little soliciting...Ahem:
I am new to FictionPress, and posted my own story yesterday. It is called 'The Curator' and it can be found on my profile. I would be very pleased if you might be able to check it out and leave a comment or two...?
No pressure, just a request. I won't be insulted if you don't, I promise.
Well, here's to a great first chapter in what I'm sure will be a great story. I will be waiting for the next chapter!
Enjoy your characters as much as they enjoy being created. Do them justice. |