 simpleplan13 2008-07-20 . chapter 1I really like your description "limitless sky" that was really pretty. I also like the last phrase, it leaves the reader to think about what he is searching for. One thing though the description "deep ocean" was a bit boring, I might work on a better word to describe the ocean.
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 Doc 2008-07-16 . chapter 1 Sometimes "cliches" are more than they seem if looked at closely. You seem to limit the search to an area of space/time that we are able to search. I like this one.
Peace, Doc |
 Thoughtful Silence 2008-07-16 . chapter 1This was short and sweet. It may be a bit clichéd but it still left a smile on my face. Kudos. Anyways, keep up the good work.
- Thoughtful Silence, courtesy of The Roadhouse (link in my profile) |
 Scarlett Wynter 2008-07-15 . chapter 1interesting haiku. a bit clichéd, but I like it. |