"He peeled the rind from the universe
And bade me drink its sweet juice
Its fight-for-life beauty."

That's probably my favorite bit. Very nice story-style kind of poetry. Much of it's a little confusing, but it makes more sense on the second read. The end of the first stanza seems a little sticky on rhythm to me, but the rest of it's really good.

Very well-written, and a very interesting, almost provocative, story. I liked the first and fifth sections the most.

Interesting, but a little confusing. This is about your mother and your father right? And there is one part where you say
His shuffle repels me. His over-kindness readies me for treachery. I cannot admire his gait, so cannot undersatnd, her love; cannot overcome. Are you saying that you hate your dad, and you can't understand why your mom loves him? I hope this is just to make your poetry dark and dramatic, I hope you don't have any problems with your parents.