Fabulous! I'm definitely interested in where this is going. _ You have a really marvelous narrative voice; it's casual, but it gets the job done. Really great job on that. Very original concept, too. Like I said, I'm hooked!

My only bits of critique have already been mentioned by other reviewers. I didn't see anything else too glaring. So, yeah, awesome intro, and I can't wait for more!

I liked this. The writing was interesting, as it was more personal to the main character instead of the average completely detached descriptions.

Only thing you need to work on really is your spelling of 'definitely'; you kept putting it as 'defiantly'. It's an easy mistake to make, though. I have problems spelling both.

As to the first reviewer for this story- the dialogue is perfect. You are only supposed to use commas instead of full stops in dialogue when the sentence doesn't end, for example when a character pauses to think about something then continues again.

Wow has he been through alot D poor kitty (I wuv cats)

I like it. It caught my attention and was suspenseful, with a bit of humor as well. One thing I do suggest, however, is that you do a bit of research on how to write dialogue. There should be commas instead of periods at the end of sentences, etc. That didn't make the story any less interesting, but it sort of ruins the flow when dialogue isn't used right. Good job though. :-)

-Mari