I really quite enjoyed this. You're an amazing writer.

~ Rose and Thorn

Very true: I think this is a reminder to all of us about what we should put first! Your brackets and rhythm reminded me of e.e. cummings, but that's probably only so specific because my experience of poetry is regrettably small. I liked it.

My only queries: should the seventh stanza be split into two? That's what I expected. And does the 'to' in the last line belong there? It looks grammatically confused to me, but I'm not a final authority!

Otherwise, excellent. You're not afraid to tell it like it is.