That was actually pretty good. A couple grammar issues and some dialogue hiccups, but still nice.

For the dialogue: “Subway!” I shout, throwing up my hands- the coat sleeves are so long that the velvety ends flap around, nearly assaulting several innocent passersby.

Don't attach action to dialogue. It slows down the flow of reading. Instead you try this:

"Subway!" I shout.
The velvety ends of his coat flap around my short arms, nearly assaulting several innocent passerby.

Just a suggestion.

Another cute story! I have read your other story involving the angels (the title of which escapes me at the moment) and left a review there; seeing you had written other stories I simply had to read them. This one had the right mix of humor and bite, was touching in quite a few scenes and is, all around, an excellent little story.

I like it, it's well thought out and doesn't involve heated kissing scenes like alot of romance oneshots do.

That was cute. I loved Amy and Lite's interaction. Very well done.

- Koki